A frightening experiece

In language with the teacher andrea we had to write a story about a frightening experience we invented including connectors, direct speech, retorical questions ,metaphors and sequence markers; Two hours were left and the people would start arriving. The coffin was in the middle of the dark room; she was inside; so pale, so calm, so beautiful and creepy. Though her piercings had been removed and she was dressed in a deep blue dress. I was watching how her family members and friend entered the room; all of them were dressed in black suits and dresses, crying in a desolate way, looking at me as if her death had been my fault. However, it was not. The fact was that if I told the truth nobody would believe me. Everything started on a Sunday night, Mia and I were returning from a wedding; the road was dark, in contrast toMia's yellow dress that shined as a million stars. - “I cannot believe she sent us away!” “What is wrong with her?” Mia asked herself. -“I do not know”...